Hey hun...persoanally, i realli liked that poem.
if u need help wit anything jst let me no k =)
u can read sum of my stuff and comment on them, they mite be able to help u with and poem techniques but i realli liked ur "first" poem.
~xoxo~

This is very good, extremely expressive,

with it beeing in a single block of text it is a little daunting at first, but it is still a brilliant peice.

F-in hel! god! dats is sooooooo gud!

I really like this poem..it explains just how i feel ritenow in my life...i really like this boy and sutff and he is kinda breaking my heart..well thnxs for the comment on my poem...keep up the great work

::Empty Inside::

I actually liked this poem a lot! I definitely can relate! If you ever need any ideas about new poems...feel free to check out my poetry!

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This is realy amazing, i can totally relate!! please rate/comment too.

Girl that poem was really good i like it alot keep up da writing
*~*Hannah*~*

Hey hey,
I really loved the poem and I feel like that sometimes. If you ever wanna talk just let me know. luv ya
thanks for commenting

This is very good. If this poem is true, then this boy is worthless and you're way too good for him. thanks so much for the comment on mine.

Thank you for the comments!! you're very nice.. and i like your poems too.

this one is really good.. it really touched me (lol! like you said sounds sorta creepy and gay) but it really did and i feel your pain. never stop writing..!!

I love it..i think it is a awsome poem and you should write more..its really good..

Gez if thats your first i cant wait to see your second!! great stuff