Great poem..and its very true actually
this poem could have a morale
"life isnt like it usto be"

Great poem..and it wasnt bad at all..my suggestion is flow
but everything else was on point
and great
5/5
~TBOY~

I liked this poem alot alot! awesome job! 5/5

Hey great job! I agree with dave... just try and hav a little more flow cause It was a tad confusing having the sens. in different lines...but I got over it... I enjoyed it
c u round
Ruthie xoxo

That's really good! I like the last lines...they like keep us in suspense!! Keep it up!!

joy*:.xx

I enjoyed this poem it's awesome :) and it's true :) I like it alot. :)

That was great and i think i already said that i wud lov to hear ya others. please add me to ya faves and i'll do the same.