Comments : Sorry

  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "As you laid dead in your cradle,
    I cried a million tears.
    I loved you more than anything,
    You were worth all my fears."

    Wow, I could tell this was straight from your heart! So very sad! Just some suggestions:

    "I'm sorry you had to go my love,
    I do anything for you back.
    I prey that you are happy now,
    Laid buried in a sack."

    I do should be I'd do.
    I prey should be I pray.

    Otherwise, I could feel the sadness sweep over me, nice work!