by Minkus
I rated this one of my own poems a five, because I think it carries a powerful message: we can never sit back and say, "I've done enough, now I can relax." To fill our potential and continue to grow as people, we always have to challenge ourselves. |
by Sondos
Wow I really enjoyed this. Had to read it several times to get the right feel of it and all but I really do like the message of this. Well Done |
by Kaylee
I liked the message you were trying ot say, at least I think you were but I think with this piece you could have gone farther with it. INstead of repeating you could have added more different parts to get the messagea cross so that people like Sondos *sorry that person had posted before me* could get the feel the first time reading. |
by Daze
Good poem, great message to people, not my fav. out of the poems i've read but it was a good poem, i also agree that you should add more words instead of repeating the same ones. |
by N J Thornton
I did enjoy this and I think the tone and repetition used makes it song-like. I loved the optimism, and your choice of words worked well. |
This poem has a brilliant message! There are so many possiblities in the world, and so much we can accomplish as people if we are not afraid to fail and are able to get over the mistakes we have and keep trying. It's like one of my favorite quotes: Fall down seven times, get up eight. I liked how you used repetion with some of the lines, it was a cool effect to add to your poem. Nice work. |