Thats a great poem i really like it alot

Bvrilliantly written. 1 suggestion though, maybe if you split it into 4 line stanazs it would help with the overall effect and make it easier to read. but it is a well well written and expressed peice

Hi my names dean i saw the same thing on tv as you did the doc..yea i cant see how some of the people were laughing about that poor young girl killing her self. any ways this poem rule i feel you.

love Dean xoxoxox

I really enjoyed this.

The pain and emotion you portrayed in this was overwhelming without being overbearing, and the melancholy really tugs on the reader's heartsrings.

Flow was good throughout, and the imagery was beautifully done, as always.

I enjoyed the repetition, I thought it worked very nicely and gave a powerful effect to the overall piece.