by unknown0208 Mar 13, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
Every time i see your face my heart begins to race. i love you with all my heart,but i know with you thats not the case.all you do is lie and cheat,and i still continue to worship your feet.i still continue to take the shit from you.it only has to be cause i love you.i don't know how to express my feelings anymore.i feel like I'm going to explode inside.i just want to run some where and hide. i just feel like apart of me has died.but at least i can say is i tried before i finally had to say goodbye. |
by Jon Hunt
Stanzas are nice, but i think its suited just as well without them, it expresses the emotion better, as though it were all to burst out rather than stream into a structure. |
by LadyPearl
Wonderful flow and expression. It would be better if you put stanzas in. Keep it up |