by Wasted Fake Smiles Mar 13, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
I look through old pictures, as thunder booms outside, |
by Brigitte
I love the main idea of this poem...And you sued excellent wording, you have an amazing way with your words that can tune in the reader to exactly what your feeling! |
by Ariana
Even though this is sad I think the ending comes off as positive, or maybe accepting. I like how you relate your feelings to the weather because it sounds very poetic. This kinda reads as a story of your life, or a journey back in time to the past, which of course is fitting with the title, so everything gets tied in together. I'd suggest working on the rhyming a bit so it sounds more natural, perhaps add in a couple of words on some lines so that the rhythm is more fluid. Congrats for coming 3rd in the poetry contest :) |
Thats so sad, I am sorry for youre loss. |
by Stephanie
I loved this poem! It has so much of your heart put into it and it flows very well! Keep up the great work! 5/5! |