A sad and painful poem, I really felt the emotion coming out
Well done

Vey powerfully written peice, the emotions are very strong. the writting itself is very good too, it flows well and is very clear.

5/5

It was interesting. I really have nothing to say, I'm not really good at commenting.

If I must admit, the way that the lines were broken up, the complete thoughts were split, I kind of liked that although it distracted me a bit, thus cutting off the flow. It was still good though, and the imagery was great.

Nice use of metaphors and adjectives.

Keep up the great work.

And my attitude has kept me going on, I don't plan on getting slaughtered by it any time soon. ahaha.

Ohh, and thank you for the comment, I made the syllables more even.

I liked it, not as good as your other poems I've read but it was really good none the less everything was just there, just didn't please to my taste. 4/5

Thankz for participating in my contest!

Great poem! i thought that

this razor blade opens the truth
though it seems as though only my skin
it breaks through this barren cage
and shows whats truly within.

those lines are amazing, this poem is one of the best ive read so far

keep it up