not too bad at all at all. It had a nice story to it which you could follow, and an ending as well, which i always try to do in a poem. It's like writing a book, you have a begining, then you have the middle, then it gets hard, because you have to try and think up an ending which matches the rest of the poem. I've spent hours just trying to write the 2 last verses of a poem!!! If they just end with no meaning at all it seems to me as if the poet couldn't be bothered trying to think of an ending...just wrote down any old crap, and went to the pub. Keep up writing funny stuff, because you've got it in you, and you'll knock out some good stuff I'm sure.

I absolutely LOVE this poem! Omg, its haha funny, and kinda like, "woops." Haha, I really loved it!! haha keep up writing! haha

good stuff...remidns me of the song ironic by alanis morissette.. keep it up!