Agh, I'm so torn between a 4 and a 5. I know it's probably an excellent song when you add the tune and instruments (or whatever) but it's not powerful enough on paper for me to give it a 5. *Cringes* Sorry!

Oh, and don't pay attention to 'Angel', I'm sure he'll get banned soon or something.

-DJ

I think this would make a really good song but I'm with Minkus of being torn between a four and a five. It may not be powerful enough but I did enjoy how the stanza's flowed together so. 5/5

Lost me in a couple of parts and your right it did flow pretty well.

~Good job.

~Retniapdoolb

Hey i really liked this style of writing, good flow indeed.

all the best and take care

Very moving poem. I can hear the melody within it. Thank you for your comments.

I wish i could hear the song!
it's very sweet huni. As friends, we all feel that way, reaching out, being there for people and being pushed away, but as long as you stick around and you understand them, as i know you do, it'll be ok!
love u sweetie
xxx

I liked the poem a lot because how it was written into a song and it was a great flow.