Just a little blood

"She sits and thinks about the meaning of life,
She can't even feel her wrist touching the knife.
"Just a little blood" she thinks in her mind,
As the blood poars, pain and tears are combined."

I loved the deep, dreary imagery you convey in this stanza. The emotion feels of intense numbness.

""This pain is better than any other pain",
she says to herself when it shoots through every vein."

I can almost feel the pain realisticly, the feel of the pain rushing and coursing through my veins. Nice.

"A wet and shiny tear falls down her cheek,
As everything goes black, some words she tries to speak."

This stanza is very sad and vivid. I can sense her end.

"She forces the words forward as her final last breath,
"Just a little blood" she says, "will lead to my death""

Exceptional, appropriate ending. I love how you started off with almost the same line in the first stanza and ended it with her own death.

overall, brilliant write. 5/5 :)

Cool, great poem with superb atmosphere and even better wording. I like the ending very much, well done.

This is the best poem i've read in a while, i really love it!! it's my favorite one of urs so far... i almost started crying while reading this, i can really relate to it, which is kinda scary... but ohwell. great job with this! 5/5!!

Forever*Yours

Dude, I love your poems! I'm definitally adding you to my favorites ;)

Problems:
She grabbes a towel and puts it over the voom,
grabbes should be grabs*

Your rhyming is great! Everything flowed so smoothly.
Again I can't choose which and my favorite lines!

Amazing Job!
5/5

I really liked this althoguh i was shoscked by detail lol but thats what i like in poetry detail because that is poetry loved it xxx alex xxx (6)