Hey Sarah, i just wanted to say nice work =) you did a good job, i quite liked the line which you got the title from, it had a feeling about it.
Just some friendly advice, try and write a little more, i think if you really set your mind to it, you could have made each one of those lines a new stanza/verse. but great work any way
Ben

Yeh gr8 poem i agreee ;) KEEP WRITING AND MAKE MORE STANZAS gr8 talent u got there