You Deserve

Mm, its good, its not as emotional as it could be but it was still good.
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This poem was a good one, i love the way it was different in the style. I like it because I can realte to it, it was very good, but poetry wise, even though, it was a poem that was meant to have thoughts poured into it, maybe the flow could be better, in a way that you brought more emotion to it, don't change the poem, but maybe make some phrases standd out more but putting them on a separate line, and try adding punctuation, that reaaly helps when you want people to sense the emotion of your poem. overall, great job

Another awesome poem :) I'm running out of things to say and I'm goign to start getting cheesey in a minute :) I agree with Silver - you've managed to do something I've been rying to do for a long time there :)

Peace. [Sole]

An interesting write, I think on some level you may have cracked the "uncliche love poem" challenge by the way you wrote this. You included many contrasts which although slightly confused me, made sense. Overall good job.
Keep writing.

I really liked this Kaylee Rose really lovely chose of words here well done!
Sondos