O SABRINA BABE!!! WOW...a whole new side of u, and ur poems! wow...i can see from the passion,the emotion,the pain, that this sceen u saw today really effected ur heart! just thank god everyday that we r lucky to not have to sell our bodies!! i dont no how to tell u as much as i want, but omg i LOVED this poem! so unique! outta all the poems ive read from anyone...ive never heard one on prostotution, and one so good! 10/5(lol) i love u
btw...i heard a silly quote today, "The tooth fairy tought us to sell our body parts for money" (wink wink)
-ur sis

Omg this actually brought a tear to my eye...i love that you got me to feel what you were...it,s terrible thats girls do that to themselves..and what you said about the broken soul is so true...(well I'm guessing I don't actually know)
anyway great job!-xxxx-

Hey there,
Lovely poem dear, and thanks for the comment on mine...Glad there is some1 else out there I can relate to. NOw getting back to this poem. Sad.. jesus christ 14-16! I have never seen that for i live in a small town where the prostitution level is very low.. but damn... and u are right.. there isnt anything you can do.. but pray that their lives will turn around miraculously.. well hmm.. as for the ending of the poem.. its not a bad ending.. but i really dont know how else to end this poem.. sorry i was of no help hun.
Monique

Hey hunn..I haven't looked at your stuff in a while! I saw that you had a new one so i thought that i would come and comment! 5/5 good job

(The ending is just fine!)

Wow..that is truly heart breaking. It disgusts me too..so much..that people could use girls like that, and that those poor girls had to resort to such atrocities.
The poem was really good..made us really see and feel desolation, fear and disgust i guess.

I hope one day we can save them..although im not sure how. This poem was a nice recognition..so well done.

And i agree, although depressing, the ending is great.

Love ya -x.x.x-

Sabrina, you have such a beautiful compassionate heart. It is sickening to see how horrible and dark parts of our world have become, when are so desparate, or low, or depressed that they give up the most sacred and personal part of them to complete strangers for a bit of cash. I would have difficulty writing a poem like this too, but you did well with it. For them ending I would do one of a few things: either show the results of the girl's actions on her life, or her family, what it has done to her; or you could have her turn her life around as a hope for the future of these girls; or you could show the depths of dispair and darkness that she has fallen into because of the way of life she has choosen and what it ends up costing her, whether it be her self esteem, her life, her self image, the love of her family, ect. That's just a few ideas. A brilliant write love, I am glad you were willing to share that message.

-Tainted Mikochan

This is such an emotional piece of work great job keep writing and take care hun sarh x

Yeah, that’s really pitiful. They can find other things
To do instead of choosing this way. It’s actually
sorta like selling your soul. Ain’t it?
You described her emotions and that atmosphere
Really well sabrina. This was a really sad poem.
much love,
marjan

Awww hun, so sad but very pwerful to read. It's a great poem and i loved it! Keep it up, keep smiling and you've got me - always luv Amanda xx

I got a new job!!!! :)

I think this poem is beautiful. It opens my mind to a new way of thinking about those type of people.

Full of emotions and feelings........wonderful job

luv,
Bharti

Really touchy theme and i can very well understand your situation, shows your true soul. With this sort of theme, i really don't think that flow/starting or ending...anything matters...great work indeed

all the best and take care of urself

I feel the same way when me and my boyfriend broked up and its really hard to deal with I know well just keep up the good work and if you want to look at my poems u can well keep up the great work

This poem is like really really gooood!
It made me grateful for the things I have and for having ppl there for me when I need them the most. I love your poem and it held alot of emmotions and its a 5/5! Great Work!

You did a fantastic job considering that you werent actullay there in person but putitng yourself in someone elses shoes. when i wrote my poem "last day" i tried to put myself in someone elses shoes plz read it and tell me what u think plz id really appreciate it:) GREAT JOB by the way:)

You did a fantastic job considering that you werent actullay there in person but putitng yourself in someone elses shoes. when i wrote my poem "last day" i tried to put myself in someone elses shoes plz read it and tell me what u think plz id really appreciate it:) GREAT JOB by the way:)

Full of so many emotions....great poem!!!keep it up~valerie

It was sad but good

Woah!

Such A Good Poem.. With Soo Many Good Rhymes Well Done.