This poem is very strong. it shows great emotion and really captures the feeling. Great job!!

The change of view point at the end is good - but you just need to sort out the line

Heâ??s trying to catch up

Peace. [Sole]

Wow what a twist. I didn't really think this was one of your best but I enjoyed it all the same. :)

:( really sad yet effective poem
Brilliant

Brilliantly written piece, very well portrayed thoughout.

5/5

It wasn't entirely good. Some problems with the flow. It had strong imagery yet the words didn't have that hook. Imagery was the most effective as was the emotions.
~S3I -Faith

Wow that's so sad, the middle stanza really tore at my heart. It made me think of a friend I lost and that's what I saw in him, a growing distance, like he was already gone. Brilliant write again x

Some real powerfull stuff her, nice work

Aw wow hun, This was really sad. Yet such a great piece of work! It was really powerfully written. Awesome job! 5/5

`natalie xx

Wow.. that was so sad, yet so powerful! excellent work! 5/5