You're really talented, you know that. I like your word choice and how you can take things from another point of view besides your own or maybe just as an unseen voice. And I especially loved these lines:

My child is still a virgin in the real world
Wide eyed and curious

This really hit home for me... I felt amazingly touched by this wonderful write. Sadness dwelled over me. A great poem, beautifully written!

I'm lucky to never have experienced my parents divorce - and I feel so sorry for anyone who has - it must be a horrible experience. You've captured somebody elses view (Something I find very hard to do) brilliantly, and I really think this is one of those poems that just .. .works!

Peace. [Sole]

:'(

Such a sad poem, filled with soo much emotion, and it's a constant sad tone all the way through, well done good poem, way to grab the reader.. keep it up.

Sad but filled with what you feel inside....very well done!.....
~*Linz~

Sad and true
I love the word 'trance' makes them sound captivating
Sounded like someone talking
Brilliant :)

O my God!!!!!! what do i tell you? that this is so sad and my heart goes out to you? or that it is so well portrayed - hats off to you?

i do hope yu are okay. take care.

love and peace always
shobhana

Wow, awesome Job! This is very sad and filled with emotion. Great Job!

~Joe~

Feeling sorry for you after i read this poem of yours. i jus pray that nobody experiences this bitter moment in life. on the whole, it is a poem well woven and meant for matured readers. as the poem advances line by line the poem creates a deeper impact on the reader as a parent and child. stay in touch. love, bhavin.

From the angle of a child ... to the dreams of a father! Beautiful, emotional write. What a daughter wouldn't give to read these words when old enough to understand. Save and share!

This is well written and very poignant. What I also liked (and I went back and read it a 2nd time) is how the emphasis really is placed on sadness; there's a distinct lack of a temptation to be judgemental. I like it.

Wow. I loved this one aswell. Really deep. Parents devorcing is hard to go through. Another awesome write.

`taleee

P.S I went to do the other one you asked, But I've already done it. So I'm just gonna choose another one mmkay?

Very sad