WOW niice words usage..amazing rythem and motion....just a phat poem lol. niice jobb please keep writign i look forward ot radign tons more..adn please please please read sum of my poems as many as u desire and i will be SURRRE to read more....thnxs

:) always Lissa

Brilliantly written, great use of vocab and progression thoughout the peice. it flows well and maintains interest thoughout

5/5

Well done. a really good write! so much emotion and the flow is brilliant.

sophie:)

ps. thanx 4 the comment

Ohmigosh, SAD!
Nicely written, lot's of emotion. I really enjoyed reading it. =)
Thank's for the comment.

Happy writing,
Hannah-

Such a sad but true poem. i loved the imagery especially in the last stanza. keep it up. and would you read some of mine if you want to. especially - your soul asks why- and tell me what you think

I have taken timeout to read some more of your work. You must have got a book out as the work you write is awesome.

Very nice write.. excellent imagery great flow and structure.. Well done.. Keep them coming