That was good! And you only started writing a few months ago...? that's really good...its hard to find the inspiration and words for for poetyry but I can see you have it in you! keep it up =) thanks for your comment on mine, btw here's a few sugestions...
"For not listening to the other man's threat"
maybe put "another mans threat" since we don't know who the man is ya know..
i don't know how you feel about advice so I won't say anything else exept well done!

A very nice poem :)

This poem does show that you've started writing poetry quite recently but I think you've started on the right foot. You've come up with something quite original and I quite liked how you told a story within the poem. It is rather simplistic but you can only improve, right?

Also, you must remember that poems don't always need to rhyme and at times when the poem does rhyme, it seems quite hard on the ear as it doesn't flow all that well. But I started writing poems with every first line of a couple rhyming with the one beneath it.

Experiment with the rhymes and soon you'll just sort of shed rhymes and move on. At times rhymes can hold a poet back from his or her potential though I do understand that it is much easier just to rhyme.

I only wish to give you advice from my own experiences and so I really do hope I haven't hurt your feelings or brought down your confidence in poetry. Poetry is not only an art, a talent but also a way of venting your emotions, sadness and frustrations of things that happen in your life and so I'm really happy that you've started writing poetry; I do not want to put a stop to that. I'm sure poetry will help you in hard times to come as they it has helped me :)

Keep up the good work! I really enjoyed it! :D