Hey I liked your poem! I gave you 5/5 good rhyme scheme! Keep it up!

Hey I liked your poem! I gave you 5/5 good rhyme scheme! Keep it up!

Hey I liked your poem! I gave you 5/5 good rhyme scheme! Keep it up!

Awesome first line.. i love the flow you started.. it started really well then it seemed like you switched up the syntax for rhythm but it seemed forced;

Discovering a side I myself resent
Bleeding heart and a strong soul bent
While whisper of dreams silently chant

.. i liked the ideas and i think you'd benefit from scrapping the strict rhyme scheme.. i liked the third stanza a lot, though shattered wings seems a bit trite..
the fourth stanza seems a bit too flowery, but thats my opinion..
last stanza it should be 'live'.. i liked the ending but i'd like more description of the candy tree, you know..
it kinda seems like it ends abruptly.. but anyway it was an awesome poem and you obviously have a good vocabulary to use, so i guess in general i'd say tell it a little more subtly... pZ =O)

Wow....very well written. i like the rhythm and wording of it. deep meaings too, and i love the ending line. good work

It was well organized and I really like it....the main meaning was at first hard to catch but the end did well at summing it all up and I really really liked these two lines "Fallen angels pile around my feet
Their shattered wings lay nice & neat"

~Retniapdoolb~

Every line is full of meaning in this well written dark poem ...I am speachless

I love your poems. They are so deep. Keep it up, girl.

This is a really good poem.keep up the good work.thanks for the comment.

Hey i love this poem. its so beautiful and strong. the way you use certain words are amazing. and it flows fantastically. i love it

Wow u haave a gr8 vocabulary! again excellent work, nice details again. 5/5

Wow, this sounds like some sort of twisted fairy tale rhyme. You did a great job with the rhyming and once again, you didn't fail to create a swarm wonderful images in my head. I can't tell you enough how excellent you are at using the english language to weave together some of the most breathtaking poems I have ever read....

I think you just earned a spot in my favorites.

Interesting...but i like it
different...yet touching
all in all..great poem yet again

-angel-

Yet i love ur poem i think you schould go into this profesinoly