I absoulutley love it...keep up the work... |
by Krysten
Wow. surpurbe, beatiful, sad and amazing all in one. great flow, great word choice, great poem. i can really relate to this too....(off to comment some more. 5/5 |
I totally agree with the comments above me =] |
by isabel
This is really an amazing poem...i surely can relate to it... |
For me personally a poem needs more structure BUT i really loved the ending. It was so emotional and the feelings expressed where so real. |
A beautiful write. :] |
by Not
I love this its is truly a good poem has a lot of meaning and feeling into it...5/5 |
by Nix
This is greatly written, you expressed sadness and your emotions on a good way and whole poem had very powerful atmosphere with interesting choice of words. Bravo, I enjoyed in this piece. |
by Hawaiizang3l
I too hate the back and forth feeling of depression! I was just feeling it today at work too! but now im ok. so weird! |
by Christina
Very good poem!!! and so sad.........keep up the good work! 5/5 |
by ABake
Wow, I love the first line. It really intrigued me. But maybe if you added a - after it while in transition two your second line.. But a wonderful way to start your poem. |
by Shinobi
This poem's structure emphazised it's meaning, I liked that. The flow was twisted, as you wanted it to be. The choosing of words and rhyming were very good. Nice job 5/5 |
Ok quick ? is it depression or a person? that is probably obvious but.... |
I like how this poem was written it suited the poem well! you are definitely one of my favorite authors! |
5/5! You are a great writer and I can relate to pretty much all of your poems, especially this one! Keep writing, I will be checking back to read more of your work! Take care! |
by Jayden
Wow! this is an amazing poem so emotional and powerful you can actually see the depression in this poem my favorite part is... |
by Melpomene
First up: Your "I"s need to be capitalized. It throws me off to read poetry when proper gramer and punctuation are not used. |
I know a poem does not actually need stanza's to be a poem, but it DOES break up your ideas to make them more managable, I think you could really benefit from this as it will help you determine which piece goes where and will help you switch parts when you think it just doesn't flow right. |
by sweet escape
This poem is very strong. it has so much emotion. |
Very well written and i can relate to it cause i suffer from depression and it sucks lol your very talented |