This is my favorite poem that I have written. It is about my father. I can't stand the things that he puts into his body, and this is, what I feel to be, my most emotional poem. I hope it gets a message across.

This is a great poem and i love what its saying...but...I think it would be better if you broke the poem into seperate stanzas instead of one big one..that will help it flow a bit better..just a helpful suggestion from your fellow clubmate....Joc

Wow! Your a very good poet! :D keep it up! lol

Wow, i've never read such an amazing veiw point on drugs before. 5/5.nice job with the message at the end.

Wow, Larry thats..deep

Okay to lighten the mood: WOW that was long! wholey hannah man! lol its like like *scolls down* [WORDS WORDS AND MORE WORDS] lol maybe slipt it into some stanzas? i dunno either way this poem is amazing. and I can tell you put your heart and soul in that poem.

Jenn

Cool, very insightful

Hey man.... great job :) I didn't enjoy it from the viewpoint that you've experienced it .... but I did enjoy it cause it was very well written.... Just a few things! *grins*

1 - the stanza thing.... makes it easier 4 us 2 read lol

2 - try to either stick to rhyming or not.... cause I was a bit confused at times *sniffs* or prehaps I'm just dumb..... lol

BUT! FANTASTIC JOB! keep it um man :)

Ruthie xoxo