I am speachless. The emotion expressed in thiese simple metaphors flow beautifully

I thought the metaphors and words were a good choice but the first paragraph didn't seem to flow with the rest of them to me.

The best and most poetic and my favorite part is the start.
You seem like a really great poet.& that part was beautifully
Written too:
“kept locked behind my
tightly closed crying eyes”
with those things you said, one can understand your
feelings better when at the end you wrote “I miss you”.
So, I really liked the way you wrote this one. Keep it up.
Much love,
Marjan

I think I know just how you feel . . .Nice poetry :)

Peace. [Sole]

You can feel the pain and the longing for that one you so miss.....truly heartfelt, so sad, but beautifully written.

love Ann

Aww, This is really good. Fav lines:
"J...My heart is longing, My heart is blue.
My heart is pining, I am missing you"
Very good poem, I loved it. And thanx heaps for the comment =]

luv natalie x-x