Something she for got to mention

by VYXSIN   Mar 19, 2006


They all though that
the cuts were real
they all believed in the
pain she said shed feel

they all fell for her
thought she needed help
but all she needed was
just to go to hell

she wanted to be noticed
focused on Thur life
so she threw away her body
and started using the knife

she only did it cause she
thought cutting was cool
i knew she did it cause
she was a fool

her arms were tattered
she didn't go very deep
she said she wanted to be dead
shes just a creep

she got what she wanted
just not from me
she wanted attention
i wanted to make them see

she had them mesmerized
under her wicked spell
but after a while
it didn't go so well

they told her to go to the
coulencer and talk it all out
she fell under her spell too
i was overcome with doubt

i just knew i couldn't
make them all see
what a bi!!? she
had come to be

she would sleep around with guys
and claim it was rape
said she was pressured
and that she couldn't escape

they just fell deeper
but there was little i could do
i try-ed to say it was an act
try to take the spell off you

you all said i was the only one
doing things unseen
telling the truth about her
you said i was uncaring and mean

she said her parents beat her
try to turn her black and blue
threw her up against the wall
she came running to you

if she wasn't fake
wouldn't she have said
something to the cops
say she wanted to be dead

something that would
make them take her family away
making her boyfriends not want to live another day

but of course she was a fake
toying with your mind
you didn't want to open your eyes
to see what you'd find

there was only one thing
SHE forgot to mention
is that the stupid bi!!?
WAS CUTTING FOR ATTENTION

** can i ask why i have such a bad rating on this?**

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  • 9 years ago

    by -Choke-On-MY-Halo-

    The reason that it had a low rating was because of the spelling including the own title my dear. Some people don't like misspelling in the poem or in the title it gives a bad first impression that being said I love how it flowed and you had a lot of spelling errors regarding how to spelling words and capitalizing the word "I" everything else was nice it flowed all the way down to the end but you're not supposed to have capitalized letters besides "I" in the poem my dear sorry to be the barrier of bad news either way I enjoyed it. The story that was the poem was dark not sad either way I loved the poem. 5/5

    -Mori

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Oh HOLY CRAP

    I LOVE this.

    The anger and rage screams out from each and every word in this, while the imagery was very vivid.

    The only thing that I didn't like was in quite a few lines you stopped the sentence halfway through and moved onto the next line and I thought that disrupted the flow sometimes.

    For the most part though, the flow was undisturbed.

    How I love that ending stanza.
    I may hate cliche self harm poems, but I have actually been through the self harm problem, so I know how irritating it is when someone does it for attention and just doesn't understand it.

    I found this to be beautifully written and filled with such intenisty..and that ending..wow. I can't get over that.

    I love this.

  • 17 years ago

    by TeAr dROp

    Aww this is sad too!!! wow i like reading you poems they touch my heart!!! keep it up

  • 17 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    This was good, but you had quite a few mistakes in it (e.g. spelling errors, not capitalizing when you should have, etc). It's those things which make people down-vote poems (sometimes).

    Anyhow, I thought it was good. If you fix the mistakes then it could be brilliant. =] 4/5.

  • 17 years ago

    by Tipycal Bully

    My friend was like that too, she was a bit of a dik, but good poem i enjoyed it

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