Comments : Cold trigger

  • 18 years ago

    by Kurt

    You don't have to force poems to rhyme. Some of the lines are confusing and don't make sense and others are brilliantly written.

    "Just one more second
    And ill be free
    Just one more second
    And no more me"

    I liked that stanza's rhythm and flow. It sounded good. Just keep playing with words and sounds and this will be a good poem.