Nice write, I'll check out more now. Cheers!

Its a good poem, im not sure about how its laid out, part of me says that each sentance should be a seperate line.. but then another part of me says that it means something how it is grouped.

Its realy good, nice work!

My lips get dry and my mind gets frayed. My hands grow weak and my ears delayed. My fear grows heavy and my happiness fades.
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I really liked that part above! It was great~

I thought it was a pretty good poem, but the only thing I would sugest is to capitilise your I's. But that's only a minor thing. Otherthan that, I loved it! Keep it up!

Natalie``

I loved this poem!
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As my eyes darken and my heart grows cold. As my days pass and i grow old. My arms grow weak and my legs won't hold. The one thing i ignored was what i was told.
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That was my favorite paragraph :)

Beautiful poetry with an excellent sense of word choice. It rhymed well, but a separation in the lines would probably do it better. Still, awesome work! 5/5

I thought the words u chose to describe were really effective. great poem!