The teddy

by alex   Mar 20, 2006


I was born in the factory
alive and kicking
i jumped of the table onto the floor
i saw a door at the end of the corridor
the exit
cautiously i opened the door
i was free!!!
no!!!
the road
it stood between me and freedom
boldly i ran out
i looked right then left, nothing
i made it to the other side of the road
i was free!!!

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  • 18 years ago

    by stargirl49

    I agree with them. it'd be so much more awesome if you had put more depth into it. but it's great!!! keep up the awesome work!! :)

    love ya,
    maggie

  • 18 years ago

    by Sarah Ann

    Wow, this was good...I mean, I know the story was about a teddy bear, but there are so many other things a reader can think about when reading this poem that makes it extremely special. Keep it up xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Kaylee

    It's cute and original but you might want to go more in depth to show us how the "teddy" really feels and looks like.

  • 18 years ago

    by PS

    Aw thats cute. maybe add more to the story. but its fine the way it is too.

  • 18 years ago

    by myshiningstar14

    I love it..tis VRY VRY VRY original..

    lissa

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