I tried the rhyming ever other line thing so hope it worked..i rly like this one..enjoy.

Lissa

Wow! what i am feeling right now...that poem can not express it any better! loved it!

A rare effort on actual form and style..... A for effort there

you spoke of your feelings of rejection by this world.. and unfortuantly that's the way it is sometimes... i feel it everyday, and just a couple days ago my heart was broken by someone i cared for for like the thousandeth time.... now if you could speak of the reasons why, and the judgment's that people make... now that would be a a amazing read... dont get me wrong this is honest and amazing too... it's just that it's easier for you to write about, because what you are writing about is how you feel... and your feelings are the easiest things to pin piont... but to try and pin piont the feelings in a nother is the hardest thing to do.... and i would love to see a poem from you that center's around that concept..... in anyway... you have major talent my friend...
phil