I like this poem keep up the good work

To tell the truth I didn't like it. The flow wasn't too well nor was the organization. It just seemed like a bunch of ideas and some things just didn't fit. It had a nice start but then just ended up being words.

I see the thought behind it. and some of the sections are good. but like Kaylee said, it lacks proper organization. btw the way i like the tragic couplet, but the words into flow better.

The start was really good but mabey try sticking to the same idea all through rather than just running off with your thoughts, they were alll nice but didnt fit togeterher so well ALLY

As i say, thanks for the tips!