WOW!!! I really connected with that poem!!! I could imagine somone sitting on a bench outside right after a rain fall. sun bright, shining through the trees...I see much hope.

love the work,
Jerbear

*Bad silver for cliche* No really just kidding. I loved the imagery the most and that last line gave such a vivid picture. I'm going to add you to favorites and I just think this is my favorite poem of yours for some reason. I don't want to repeat myself, so I won't say anymore.

Nah its not too cliche it was great i really liked it exellent imagery xx ALLY xx

Great imagery, it made me feel asthough I was really there, wow! I didn't find it cliche at all.

Wow...breath taking....amazing ending....*catches breath*
What's the name of your book?

[lostlaureate - come find me]

I like it. It has a lot of words I'm unfamiliar with, mainly because english isn't my first language. But I love to read something that showes a little different vocabulary use. It was fun to read it. Keep up the good work! ^_^

*BrokenToy

Very good use of imegry within this peice and some interesting vocab usage too. this peice has a smooth flow and great content

5/5

I didnt really understand it... but im sure its really good, there was a good flow.

Jacs
xxx

I didn't find it cliche at all. You were really on top of this poem and the imagery was certainly thought provoking..set my imagination off....great poem...

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