by jamie ellen Mar 23, 2006
category :
Life, society /
other
Catch me on a better day |
by Stabbylou
It's quite erratic but I'm not sure if you inteded it that way, I quite like that it is. There are some good lines in there, especially liking the ending, it's powerful. Well done. |
by Kaylee
Same as what I said before. Really good ideas and you could have a lot of promise if you reorganize things. |