I think you should break it up every so often to improve the flow. I'm sure people csn relate to it but it makes it a bit easier to read when it's sperated. also, I did see some spelling mistakes but other than that, it was alright. Keep writing.

I liked you poem it reminds me of me and my nigga freind but the only difference is you drink and i smoke weed

dont drink and drive so
smoke and fly