Moments of Make Believe

by Jeffrey   Mar 25, 2006


With lies transparent, and our skin bare
it becomes apparent, we are far beyond repair
dazed by a persona I had been delicately weaving
I was superman to you, but looks are deceiving

for the sake of dignity, open your eyes and flee
using the advantage of clarity, to set yourself free
I should admire the attempt to reach higher
burning our memories in the fire of new desire

moments of make believe
one lonely, the other naive
love is a rarity
it was no different here
we disguise disparity
but never unaware
when someone only
pretends to care

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  • 17 years ago

    by Jess

    Okay so i need to redeem myself from the last comment I left for this poem. I can't say much about this, and i think you know why. But seriously its written really well. Its probably one of your better flowing poems. The way you rhymed and the number of syllables you used for certain lines, makes it sound really nice. If I didn't know what it was about, I would really really really enjoy it. I do enjoy it. But only really enjoy it instead of reallyx3 enjoy it, because it makes me jealous. And this is the first time I noticed the "our skin bare" part.
    pee ess- the whole funnel effect makes it sound like one of those ugly geese broke into your room right now cuz you are "making noises" if you know what I mean. i love it (well except the sounding like a goose part)

  • 18 years ago

    by limp

    Ohh adolph.

    such loving words.

    i am so jealous jeffrey, that people like adolph don't comment my poems every day.

    tsssk. lucky.

  • 18 years ago

    by mistressxsork

    Um. this one was actually good. So I have nothing to say about it =)

  • 18 years ago

    by mistressxsork

    Well. you are basically making me comment this one. I have already told you how I felt. It is better than the others. But the title is .. ew. Lol. Nice work. poo.

    -Jennifer. Overall Rating:4.7/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Savanha

    VERY GOOD! wow... i would pick a fave line, but ever single one was absolutely wonderful.

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