Good message. Nothing in this world is free. Expectly freedom. Im going to give you a few tips..
~Put a space between the words 'sacrifice' and 'or'
~I would not repeat the flow of the word somtimes.
sometimes it comes at a higher price
somtimes it comes at a higher toll
sometimes it takes lives, family, or relatives
sometimes it takes a mother, a father, a son or a daughter
sometimes it takes a sister, a brother, an aunt, or an uncle
it always takes something
sometimes even a home.
Maybe get rid of sometimes and put something like.. 'At times' or just get rid of the word and don't put anything in the place of it.
It comes at a higher price
Our Freedom comes at a higher toll
Sometimes it takes lives, family, or relatives
At times..a mother, a father, a son or daughter
Our freedom may take a sister, a brother, aunt, or an uncle
Our Freedom always takes something
Maybe even a home
^^Maybe something like that. The only reason I say that is becasue the reader may get lost in what that "something" is taking sometimes.
Sorry to change your writing. But I think you have alot of life in this poem it just needs more description on freedom.
Great work though, I enjoyed reading it. I hope you didnt take any offense on this comment, because I wasnt applying any.
*Julie*