Awww Very Awesome poem, I love this one, the way u ended this poems is just so creative and well thought very nice work here...
Karms...

Tha is an excellent job. A 5 scorer from me, just for the concept and ending. The flow is also good, I mean.. all in all that is a lovely piece of work. Ther eare some points on language that can be improved that I will point out. Also this is more of a song , I mean it would be lovely as a song.

You must pay more attention to your Punctuation. I think you have wronge d the punctuations at lines like

"I can't help but need you,
With you I can laugh."

"When your tender arms,
Hold me tight, Don't let go"

"They go to the beach,
All night there, They lay."

The stanza
"Our life, It was great.
But then one perfect night,
You proposed, And I fainted.
The moment so bright."

is off the flow by terms of language and the flow can be better by rephrasing it, but the conceptual integrity is still held. That is a nice thing.

The line "When your tender arms," in the fourth stanza will better the flow if it reads "With your tender arms;"

The word "From" in the line "From the noise of the cars" does not relate well to the previous line and hence shoudl be replaced by a more relative word like "Away from" or "Close to".

The line "The years had gone by," in the third stanza from the last in the first section of the poem should read "The years have gone by,"

The line "They're life comes to an end," in the second stanza of the second section of teh poem hsould read "Their life comes to an end,".

Awhhh! That was soo sweet hunny. The flow was great although a little awkward at times. The details were beautiful and this told a lovely love story. It was however verrry long. Nice job though 5/5

Wow, this is very emotionally written. I actually cried when I read this.The flow and the structure was very well. You are a very good writter. Keep up the good work.

Peace, Joe

Anotherr long poem but yet again u kept me intrigued the whole way thru it... u have made it on to my favs list i love ur style

This part:
United we stood,
And united we stand.
United forever,
we'll be hand in hand.

it didn't really go with it, at least the united part it kinda made me think of the army. yeah but it was still good i gave it a 5/5

Awww. It sounds like you wrote about The Notebook. It made me smile. =]
Excellent flow yo it. Keep up the good work. I am going to add you to my favorites. You are really talented.

>black&&blue

WOW!! this poem was great. it was really long but i just couldnt stop reading!!! it was amazing.

but it seemed like there were some "flowing" issues. i mean all in all it flowded pretty well but it seemed at some points not so much.

but great job!! keep it up. you have a major tallent!!

Aww.. this is soo sad.. but soo happy.. lol.. :D ... a very unexpected ending.. well i mean the second half i knew it was coming.. but you know what i mean.. the flow is flawless once again and the rhymes are great... the word choice is wonderful.. i like how you kept it simple but still the poem turned out really strong.. a very enjoyable read.. definitly worth more than a 5

I LOVE THIS POEM. It's so beautiful. It really is, and the ending is really really good.
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