I can semi relate to this poem, and it is a lovely poem, but again, it is let down by the structure you use. It would be much better off arranged into stanza's or rhyming couplets, rather than single lines, one space apart. I hope this helps, as it is a shame to see lovely poetry ruined by the structure.

Peace. [Sole]

Your poem is pretty good with a lot of emotions. But I get thrown off by the way it is written. Writing it one line at the time breaks the whole poem. Try putting it more connected and it will be a great poem.

*BrokenToy

It's a good poem, very nice, emotional, well written. Keep it up. Thanks for the comment btw although the poem wasn't meant to rhyme...

Beautiful, deep emotions and a great poem. 5/5!

Brilliant. Fav lines:

"I hope it doesn't, I hope that that's impossible

I beg that my love for you is believable and possible"

[lostlaureate - come find me]

I know i reda this a million tiems but i lvoe it adn umm I am 16 soon to be 17 and I have been writing poems ever since I was in like 2nd grade....maybe younger??? No clue but my serious stuff umm abotu 5 years I guess...all I know is that I want ot be a prof. writer and my bf thinks that I REALLY should to lol. So yea thats one of my dreams..also I aparently to him am an amaziing singer which i have been singing since i was like 3 so i wanna put out demos and makes cds at sum poin also i want ot model..what do u want to do?? jw jw

by the way U ARE GODO DONT EVER SAY UR NOT..i lveo ur prospective...keep it up

lissa

U have such a grrt span of wording and ur rhyme sceme is unique in evry poem...i havent turned to the self-mutilation but i hav gotten low enough to...i am too much of a life-lover to commit....ur gf is VERY lucky to hav u...i am glad things are going strong still even after the myspace thing....ur a grrt writer and thx for ur ongoing comments,
sore