Really good and interestng and it makes u think |
by N J Thornton
Ooh I liked the twist on the last line from "she" to "you." I think you used some lovely and powerful descriptions that really painted an image in my mind. I found it a very touching write indeed. On the first line of the last stanza I think you're missing "were." |
by Sole
Your poem paints such beautiful imagery, the 'glass road' its so sad! But I know just how the person in the poem feels, I would love to live in amongst nature, in peace :) |
by mkml
Thanks for commenting mine. =] |
by StefQ
WoW my imagination is going crazy lol i adored this poem espacially this :"Blue eyes sad like the ocean longing for the faith of the sea." i don't know why but that touched me the most! another great job :) |
by Natalie
Thats really good. You used alot of good words to describe things. It sounded perfect! Loved it! 5/5 |
by azlan26
"Dying inside without the light of flames igniting her world" and the last line really stuck out for me |
by Daze
Another great one I ahve to say, very creative, and the words you used were captivating, like a dreamer your poems are so imaginary, it's like you think of places, feelings and gracefully put them in wrods great job! |
by Jenny
A great poem, thoughtfully written, with great description, with deep meaning aswell, great! Keep writing!! |
by *~vixen~*
Very touching. 5/5 |
Beautiful... Natural... Soft & sublte, yet you got your meaning across. Good use of imagery and techniques. Once again I'm blown away. |
Not my type of poetry but I see where you're coming from. |
by Alex Marlatt
Very good, I didn't see any problems, and I liked the message the last two lines really brought it together I think. |
by LiL K
Again, great poem! I really like how you described how this person feels. I dunno if you're describing you or someone else from your point of view...either way, it was an awesome poem! |
by holly
I liked this and it was very original nice imagery and description, really liked it xx ALLY xx |
by Laura Ash
I loved how you described everything. Like "sun-kissed hair" & "pastel skin" |
by Angie
Oh I truly love this one...... always be who you are, don't be who you're not. Its ok to dream and to follow those dreams too as long as you do as you! Wonderful write.......... |
Great write |
by Fallen~Tears
WOW great job as usual all i can say is wow 5/5 |
by Laura
Another great write. I believe there is a lil girl like that inside all women. |