by Tripp Mar 26, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
Wow, I've just been churning out the sad poems lately...as usual, vote and especially comment ;-) |
Wow did he kid die..i mean u said "not once looking back, he leaves this world to be seen and never loved again." wow as i rewrote thta httas kind of intense..he left but only to come back stronger and better than ever....INTENSE MAN lol |
by Sole
Again, the structure is poor (I have to be honest) But the poem is good. If you could just re-arrange the poem in a more suitable style, the actual poem would become less labourious to read. The rhyming was good, but faltered a little at times. |