Again, the structure is poor (I have to be honest) But the poem is good. If you could just re-arrange the poem in a more suitable style, the actual poem would become less labourious to read. The rhyming was good, but faltered a little at times.

Peace. [Sole]

Wow did he kid die..i mean u said "not once looking back, he leaves this world to be seen and never loved again." wow as i rewrote thta httas kind of intense..he left but only to come back stronger and better than ever....INTENSE MAN lol

lataz lissa