by shobhana kumar
Good one Christy! simple, truthful and well written. |
A very introspective piece, Christy, and very well done.It really says so much about you.Just a suggestion, but I would switch the 'ain'ts' to 'isn'ts' for a better flow. and though the last line is excellent, it don't sem to fit with the rest of the stanza/piece.That said it is a very personal piece yet also says so much truth about life. |
Nice one Christy. Looking forward to reading more of your stuff. |
by Ben Pickard
Simple, truthful and well written with a directness and nice flow. |