I really enjoyed reading your poem, it read beatifully and had a good rhyming scheme, it ma have been even easier to read if it was split into stanzas but that is your decision.

5/5

The staza's might have had a better impact if they were seperated. I thought it was just too dark in the start *good thing I guess if that's what you wanted* then kind of light and then back to dark again.

I liked it. im not all that dark-ish. and i didnt really like it until it came to the part when some took away the knife etc. after that i loved it. very awesome. i agree with kaylee; that it might be better if you split it up into stanzas and stuff.

Seperate them to really pull an audience in, but it's a good poem, nevertheless.