You're the one

I like it.. it is very sweet

WOW , so lovely poem
Biya

I like it. my style is pretty similar to yours. keep it up

Actually,this is one of my favorites.
but one thing...in the 4th section it says "
i dont know what I'll do" well i think it would sound better "I dont know what I'd do" but thats just my opinion. other than that,wonderful poem!

Oh dear me. This poem was not very strong in my opinion, it had a rather weak structure (missing puntuation, etc.) and the rhyming was very common and not very creative. You had plenty of emotion though, which is good. I must say, the thing that bothers me the most in writing is bad grammar. You REPEATEDLY made the mistake between "your" and "you're".