Oh i like this, thats a very erm i supose trying point it ends on..i still cant get my head around it, but it is very good.

Very nice work!!

Jon

A great poem, it really made me think, which takes a lot - lol!

A love how you wrote it. Like A illiusion.....
A illusion...
etc.

Really like it.. Such short words but the effect you leave on readers is really chilling.
There's just one critique..when before a vowel, 'a' isn't used, instead 'an'.
So with 'a illusion' it just rings wrong.
Take care sweetie...great poem
>torn -x.x.x-

It's different, but defantly very good. your word choice is perfect, really adding to the peice and the content is brilliantly expressed.