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  • 18 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    "i think to me,"
    should be 'myself' instead of 'me'
    ~~~
    "its not depression I'm just sad."
    it's should have an apostrophe
    ~~~
    "I'm not going to loose again,"
    should be lose,not loose.
    ~~~
    I think it could have ended stronger, but was a good emotional piece.