You kept me guessing on where you were going with the poem... I loved how you portrayed each year of the girls life... Another very creative write!

VERY LONG!! BUT I STILL LOVE IT!!

I really did love this poem, it had a lot of feeling in it. It actually did bring a tear to my eye. It was really powerful.

Wow that was really good its filled wit lots of feeling and heapz of life. 5/5

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I like how you included the original, and how you actually went through the trouble of re-writing it. i never do that with my poems haha. great poem, and excellent imagery

In the first stanza you made a spelling mistake. You wrote ' puff pf dust' and I think that you ment it to be of. I thought that I would let you know that. I liked this poem too. I think that attics are cozy places that every house should have. Mine dosen't because my mother decided to turn it into a second floor. 5/5

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It is sad how fast the time flies. This is a great poem. Keep it up

Oh wow...excellent poem.
hehehe...i loved the comment you gave me...i read that book too(blood and chocolate)...loved it.
anyways...loved your poem. 5/5.

Awww.. that was so sweet! what a great idea, and how originall.. it was a bit rough around the edges with the flow, but i think the idea made up for that! nice write! 5/5

This poem is very descriptive..i felt like i watched ur memories on a slideshow..Good Job..KEEP IT UP