by Twisted Heart Mar 29, 2006
category :
Nature, environment /
nature
There's a little daffodil |
Good write. I think in line 5 you meant to say: The root that's planted in the box. Otherwise you'd need to say that are planted... but that wouldnt flow---The rhyme scheme is a little hard to get used to but after i read it through a few times it flowed well. You have to read it a certain way... I would suggest separating it into stanzas accordingly so the reader will read it right. Overall however, I was a good poem and puts a small smile on your face as you put together the clear imagery. |
GREAT 5/5 |