I read this poem about ten times before I felt that I fully grasped the heartfelt meaning of every word and line! It was perfect and so deep! I loved how you didn't write this as normal, but took time to write like you were different elements and things. I loved how it seemed that the words weren't coming from you.... But as though they were the words of your soul!

That was great

"I'm struggling against the vine of independence
But you continue, so transcendence"

Your a clever little angel (minus her wings). Your new stuff is new and shows much progression...maybe you mean transcendant here?

[lostlaureate - come find me]

The first two lines threw me a bit
but it was stilll great
bla de bla
grovel grovel
i love you so vote 5 on my poems
suck up suck up

That Was Beautiful The Way You Used Words That Aren't Used By Many Is Just Maraculous( If Its Spelt Right) I'm Speechless 5/5 xoxo-Nikki-xoxo

The first two lines ran too long that it just seemed out of place. Try breaking them up because they really are great lines. I really liked the imagery of this poem more than your other poems. It felt more deep and emotional for some reason.

Wow this is beautiful.you use some great words and comparisons. i can feel the constant fighting against something. nice job!

It was great to read, it didnt flow too well but you can get a sense of power from it. xxx