I really like it. its a nice story and its wonderfully written. i was hoping that it would be a little longer so that there relationship could develop, but thats just me. nice job!

What a heartfelt poem! =) I also like the story behind this poem. I've noticed that some of your poems have a story behind it but you do a very good job of making sure its still a poem. Great flow and great concept ;)

--emotionless.19*

It's great story with the penned you've done here, though sad but well writen. absolutely beautiful poem, you've great talent here. keep them coming, take care, love gloria.

I love the title and the story behind it was interesting...watch out for the typo on "minimum" and "tragically".....good stuff...

[lostlaureate - come find me]

Awesome rhyming 5/5 keep it cool and keep it up
-Janean

A good effort, great inspiration and well put together, theres a few spelling mistakes that should be corrected and you've used the wrong 'vain' in the last line. but well done xx