Oh dear, Its great poetry...but I sense a great lack of self- esteem and I cant understand why? It's an amazing poem. I can't relate so much to it personally but its wondefully done. Wasn't so keen the word "stop" seemed overuse...but had an accumulative effect of showing how the outside influence affected you. In plain english...nice work...

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I can't really relate except I would tell myself some of the same things when it came to my own writing. As I want to be a writer and al. I think Stop was overused a bit but I think it did have some effect on the poem.

As far as poems go, the rhythm and rhyme worked out very well. I thought the message was coherent, and it wasn't overly-done. As far as the message, I'm not entirely sure I agree with it. The purpose of dreams, beliefs, and goals isn't to reach for the impossible, it is to continually reach for something a bit further away. Being an individual IS having beliefs and dreams. Only when you're laying down, seemingly defeated are you devoid of hopes and goals. When you're standing and ready to go, that's when you have something to go for. You might accomplish some of your goals, but the point of dreams is that they are to never be accomplished. The journey towards your dream is the reward of having it in the first place.

Heh, whatever I suppose. Good poem.

I liked the last stanza, it was quite an inspirational last verse, great work!!

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This is basically amazing!! hehe.. i mean the rhyme and flow wer perfect.. gr8 write.. i ejoyed it very much.. it was like a wake up slap.. even tho i hate seeing somebody being a pessimist, by the end of ur poem, u made it ryt again:D.. but i absolutely love ur poem.. words are deep and reli talk about a story.. so.. thumbs up
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NannO