Very different write.... I loved how you described the toy as a babies lover!

It was different to have the toy as a baby's lover. I thin kthe flow was better but maybe describe exactly who is looking and more of what they are looking for/ what they see while looking :)

Wow, amazing Job. The Flow and the Rythm was great. This peice was short but to the point. Keep up the good work.

~Joe~

Its amasing!

Love
Jacs
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I really enjoyd this poem...it was writen well and had a great flow...and fit well...nice job..
Emma 5/5