by Jon Hunt Mar 29, 2006
category :
Life, society /
inspirational
So he's the cause; |
by Zomi
I love this poem Jon, and thankyou for writing it. I think it sums everything up for me. Keep writing! I love your stuff! |
The peice s very good, good structure and rhyming thoughout. the flow is mainly smooth, though there are a few rougth patches they quickly recover. |
by Biscuit
The rhyming in this poem is good but the rhythm could do with a little tweaking here and there, theres a few too many syllables in a couple of lines which interrupts the flow, but it was still a great read! xx |